Sunday, May 06, 2007

Sunday Scribbling - Ocean

I am NOT a poet. I struggle with the idea of poetry. It's so subjective, so personal, so - not what I love about literature. It's not a story, not a piece of a story. It's like a slippery, jello-like, unstructured piece of a person's soul. I always feel weird writing poetry - like I'm trying to bead with a blindfold. Like I'm trying to write with my left hand instead of my right. It feels awkward, but I'm trying to experiment a bit with this foreign form and seeing how it might improve or refine my other writing.

Here's one I wrote during Spring Break while we were at Pacific City after a long walk on the beach by myself. God and I had a long conversation and I wrote this in response.

I wished for the glimmer
of a stray diamond to catch my eye
the promise of a problem solved.
You gave me a garden of jewels
shining, shimmering in the sand
all mine, with no cost
and a promise to bring
beauty and worth to this broken shell.

10 comments:

Wanda said...

Kim I could picture you walking along that beach having a conversation with God...and out of that came something beautiful, not slippery like jello, but deep with substance....evidently, you don't have to be a poet to write poetry!
I for one loved it!!

Tammy said...

Wow, you are a natural Kim! xxoo

khambagirl said...

Kim, this is a wonderful poem. I am so glad that you shared it with us.

GreenishLady said...

Chanced upon this, and I'm so glad I did. A lovely poem. Thank you.

Kamsin said...

Great poem! I love poetry myself, perhaps for the very same reasons you don't like it so much. Anyway, this poem is great, simple but very effective.

Chelise said...

Kim,

This is beautiful. I often refer to a quote I once wrote in my journal, where I described the look of light reflected off water, as "a thousand diamonds falling from the sky."

Your poem evokes a similar aesthetic. How funny it is that writers are connected in such ways, eh?

- Chel

Brad said...

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Amber said...

Meaningful. Very nice, friend.

:)

Cheryl said...

Kim, You are definitely a poet, even if you didn't know it! (We do!)

Thanks for sharing your personal thoughts and conversation with all of us.

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